For the one sentence pitch, you voted
#1: 66 votes: Career-obsessed Jess always knew falling in love had risk, but she never imagined online dating could endanger her life as well as her heart.
#2: 16 votes: After her bold and daring fiancé dies in a plane crash, successful in work, doomed in love HR Manager Jess goes on a quest to find another hero to love, and finds several, including herself.
#3: 36 votes: Successful in work, doomed in love Jess always knew falling in love had risk, but she never imagined online dating could endanger her life as well as her heart. Think: Tinder Swindler meets A Curve in the Road
Next challenge: Which longer pitch?
#1: Jess is never dating again. Her track record stinks. An abusive first husband. A fiancé that dies the night before their wedding.
She buries herself in her HR job for three years until her best friend throws her “missing-in-action” empty life in her face and dares her to date five men—just five—“if it doesn’t work, I’ll cease and desist.”
But then Jess connects with Nathaniel, a man with a tragic past with whom she feels a strange connection, and who promises to give her what she and Finn had, a love that changed her life.
And then there’s the hunky detective who rescues her from a snowdrift.
Just as Jess believes she has a third chance at love, she uncovers her new beau’s hidden agenda. Using her HR skills, Jess must outsmart a con, and do it without losing her belief that she could find love.
#2: Reeling from the death of her fiancé, HR manager Jess buries herself in work. Determined to climb out of grief, she posts her profile on an internet dating site, where she falls for a con artist who uses her unresolved grief and heartache to target her. At work, Jess handles workplace bullying, sexual harassment and supports employees combatting domestic violence. She gradually realizes she could use her professional skills assessing a man who seems too good to be true. When the truth rolls over her in a wave, she needs to decide—give up on love and shut down again or use her HR skills to turn the tables, become a huntress, and end his game.
Looking forward to your thoughts, insights, reactions.
I prefer #2. The first one tells way too much of the story.
#2 is the better option
Thanks, Sheila!
I’ll go with #1 on this one.
Thanks, Dan!
#1 really pulled me in.
Dee, thanks!